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    vLost Innocence

    hatred in my eyes
    want and desire in his
    whats happening?
    touching every curve
    forced down, silenced by hands
    what are you doing?
    No!, but the screams aren't heard.
    don't do this, tears come rushing down
    my body is weak
    his power is great
    taking full control, stop!
    hearing a zip, feeling something hard
    feeling hands on my mouth
    please God, No!
    don't do this
    thrust after thrust, it's over
    the screams of a victim
    a man takes another soul
    first it was friendship then became rape
    minute after minute
    no one deserves this
    finding my escape
    the trigger is pulled
    blood runs through the veins
    no goodbyes
    no sweet revenge
    only a cold grave
    death was my escape
    they never knew, never wanted to know
    this might be true, might not be so
    just feel sorrow for the unloved soul.

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    hmmmmmmmm.... u got deep wit this. I sincerely liked it.

    My thought pattern was first -- okay... where is this poem going, and as i continued to read
    I gained more understanding -- And the picture you were painting became clearer with each following
    line. Good job --- if this is all originally material writing by you

    Question....
    "finding my escape
    the trigger is pulled
    blood runs through the veins
    no goodbyes
    no sweet revenge
    only a cold grave"

    Who is shot? The victim or did the victim get her hands on a gun --then committed suicide becuz its hard for women to live through the thought of someone rapping them or did she kill the attacker. :confused:

    Also, did u write this poem from your own personal experience or something?
    Look up in the sky and tell me what you see
    The clouds, naw nigga, not me
    I see opportunity, I'm a opportunist
    Nigga, you heard what I said, "I'm a opportunist"

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    thanks... yes this is my work.. wrote a few years back, no its not from personal experience, just something that came to me.

    In this the victim commits suicide because like you stated it is hard to live through that..

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    Wow very deep i love the poem,,I love the way you put excitement into it with out going over board and getting graphic,,Nice and clean and to the point clearly written..GOOD JOB

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    good work...poet 2 poet

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    Cool

    i personally liked it ...and its refreshing to hear some poetry without a beat in the background
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    Quote Originally Posted by Orchid View Post
    i personally liked it ...and its refreshing to hear some poetry without a beat in the background
    read some poetry... how u gon hear it when u reading it
    Look up in the sky and tell me what you see
    The clouds, naw nigga, not me
    I see opportunity, I'm a opportunist
    Nigga, you heard what I said, "I'm a opportunist"

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    Quote Originally Posted by Opportunist View Post
    read some poetry... how u gon hear it when u reading it

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    Quote Originally Posted by Opportunist View Post
    read some poetry... how u gon hear it when u reading it
    oh shut up smartass
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    Stronger Than You Think I Am

    When you look at me, what do you see?
    When you listen to me, what do you hear?
    When you judge me, what do you think?
    Have I met your expectations?

    You know what?
    I don't care what you see in me
    I don't care what you hear from me
    I don't care what you think of me

    I was born without you
    I was raised without you
    I have survived without you
    And I will die without you

    Life has gone by in silence
    Always keeping my feelings inside
    My heart is screaming
    Was I not good enough?

    Realize this, I don't need you
    That hurts right
    Yeah I know it's harsh-
    Live with it.

    You said harsh words
    Never tell a child to shut up!
    Everything won't be alright
    But life goes on

    You left,
    I stayed.
    You forgot,
    I remembered.

    I'm not like you in any way, shape, or form
    So I just want to say this one thing
    I don't need you.... dad.

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